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Untrue by ~looking-for-hope:iconlooking-for-hope:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Spoken Word


Leave me here to die
To wallow in my lies
It shouldn't come as a surprise
That I was hiding behind a disguise

Here I am, exposed
All the doors, no longer closed
I knew it was only a matter of time
Before you unveiled my crime

Don't criticize, just leave me here
I'm a lost cause, don't shed your tears
You deserve someone better to love
Someone that you can be truly proud of

So go back to your life, I'll disappear
The mistakes I've made were too severe
I'm giving up now, but remember this..
Through everything, I loved you, dear.
©2009 ~looking-for-hope
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Author's Comments

Upon requests, I made this longer =3

I really like it now =]

Though.. it doesn't really send a good message =P

For the record I'm anti-suicide. <3

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Mood: Helpful ~Soulenemy Mar 11, 2009, 7:59:16 PM
It's pretty good for a short poem,
I wish it was longer though. :)

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work in the day and work in the night,
no ones here to stay, but im here to fight,
in the darkness, ones left standing,
giving it his all, but not forgetting
the time has past, no ones near
all you hear is your souls fear...
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~looking-for-hope Mar 11, 2009, 8:06:47 PM
Thanks =]

It would've been longer if I was actually feeling like this, lol. You might like "depression" by me if you prefer this one to be longer =] I was actually feeling then, but shhh, it's a secret, lol.

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*shooot-me Mar 12, 2009, 4:47:05 AM
i really like it, but i feel like its missing more, you need to add more :XD:

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*saida-freestar Mar 12, 2009, 6:53:19 AM
nice but it makes me want more.

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Will You Still Care?
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~looking-for-hope Mar 12, 2009, 6:58:08 AM
Hmm.. Everyone seems to be saying that, lol. I'll try to work on this one too =]

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*saida-freestar Mar 12, 2009, 9:39:25 AM
o this is so much better i love so much.good job friend

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In Our Darkest Hour
Will You Still Care?
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~looking-for-hope Mar 12, 2009, 9:42:29 AM
Thanks!! ^_^ You're encouragement helped a lot <3

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